Revising and Adding the Noun Absolute to Last Week’s Blog (And Using the Lanham method)
Structuring Sentences—an arduous and difficult task—and Painting with Participles (one of four brushstrokes in prose)
‘The bedroom intruder” is a music video which was fabricated from a newscast covering the details of an attempted rape in the Louisiana projects. [‘The bedroom intruder,’ a music video adapted from a newscast, addresses attempted rape.] In the original news clip both the female victim and her brother, black and homosexual, are interviewed [ADJECTIVES OUT OF ORDER]. [The original news clip interviews both the female rape victim and her brother.] Emotions spewing, the statements made by the victim’s brother construct the bulk of this blog [NOUN ABSOLUTE].
One of the first statements made by the news anchor [ Stated by the news anchor], “emotions were running high,” implies the interview is going to be “emotional.” In hindsight, a better perspective than foresight, one can argue that this statement by the news anchor may in fact be homophobic in nature [APPOSITIVE IN COMMAS]. The statements made by the victim’s brother, although, account for more of the original news cast than anything else [Statements attributed to the victim’s brother account for the majority of the original newscast]. The victim’s brother, fuming mad, iterated explicit warnings to the attempted rapist [PRESENT PARTICIPLE (fuming), PAST PARTICIPLE (iterated)]. Next, take a look at some of the most memorable statements of the victim’s brother: strong warnings, messages of a homosexual male, misunderstood [APPOSITIVE WITH COLON, ADJECTIVE OUT OF ORDER].
As put by the victim’s brother, “Hide your kids, hide your wife, hide your husbands too!” This statement, courageous and bold, is a warning to others to watch out for perverts and rapists. Yet, did the producer of the news cast really need to include the entire quote, which alludes to the idea that the victim’s brother is worried about “hiding husbands too.” Here, it seems that the news cast is playing up the victim’s brother as a homosexual. The victim’s brother, undeterred, continues to warn the rapist that he forgot his shirt. And the rapist better know that the shirt has his fingerprints.
“You are so dumb,” says the victim’s brother to the rapist.
“Run and tell that, run and tell that, run and tell that…HOMEBOY!”
HO—OH—OME—BOY!”
